Board Thread:Fun and Games Forum/@comment-26388714-20151017180041/@comment-26664320-20151021235056

Derp2000 wrote: (Thank you for the compliment Warboss. Grammar isn't my strongest, if you (and others) can help me, that would be great.) (In this instance it is not grammar that is concerned, but rather how you wrote the post in general. For starters if you're going to have your character get into an engagement with anything, then you should write some details as to what happened. Take my post for example, I didn't just tell the reader that three minotaurs walked into the room, killed two Cabal, and wounded the Bracus. Instead I used descriptive details and wording to explain to the reader what exactly happened between the Bracus, and the minotaurs. In your post on the other hand you simply skipped writing your character as killing the Cabal forces, instead you just told your reader that he did. Remeber, always explain or show, don't tell.)